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a hundred years ago some people believed that the human race was steadily making progress in all areas. Nowadays there are less certainty that this is the case. In what areas do you think the most progress has been made so far? In which areas does more need to be done?

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In the present world, humanity has definitely made a lot of
progress
 in almost all areas. There are many advancements that
benefits
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 the human race.
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 as
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 advancements in computer
techonology
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technology
, medical science,
economy
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 and many more. Though I can see as to why there
are
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 less certainty. I think the most
progress
 that has been so far are in areas like computer technology. While in areas like the
energy
 sector, still requires more to be done. As we can see in recent
years
, computers
has
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 really become an important part of our
lives
. As
the
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technology progresses, computers became much smaller and are integrated
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 many devices that we use in our daily
lives
. Nowadays,
people
 live a much easier life than
people
 in the past. Technology
such
 as smartphones really helped us to do our work or to communicate with others. And some
people
 could still work while never leaving their home. These examples
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 why I think it has made the most
progress
 in recent
years
. I think that the
energy
 sector has not made much
progress
 from 100
years
 ago. We still burn things to convert
it
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 to
energy
. As we know
this
 resulted in global warming
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 since we have not converted to using clean
energy
. If we do not improve
this
, there will only be more problems ahead of us. And as we use more
energy
 to live our daily
lives
, we will only need more
energy
 to convert.
That is
 why I think countries all over the world, must really prioritize to make more
progress
 in
this
 field. To summarize, with the advancements of computers,
lives
has
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 become much easier. But, because there are more things in our daily
lives
 that
requires
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energy
, we must really improve the way we get our
energy
 from. Since I think, we really have not made much
progress
 in the
energy
 sector and still are doing things
that
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people
 100
years
 ago.
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