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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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There is a general belief that some
people
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 are talented by born
such
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 as in the field of
music
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 and
sport
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 and others are not.
On the contrary
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, it is established by some
people
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 that any child can become a musician or
sportperson
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sportsperson
sportspersons
sport person
 if he or she gets trained. I personally believe that talents like
music
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 or
sport
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 are inborn and not everyone can be a good sportsperson or singer if he wishes. Certain
people
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 might show excellence in
music
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 or
sport
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 and it is only because they are gifted with
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talent
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 by
birth
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. More specifically, they do not need extra training or teaching to excel in those
fields
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.
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, Muhammed Rafi, a renowned singer of Pakistan revealed that he attained his singing
talent
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 by
birth
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 and he did not require any extra support to flourish in the
world
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 of
music
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. I personally believe that there are some
talent
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fields
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 in
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world
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such
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 as
music
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, dance or
sport
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, which need some
birth
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talent
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. If some
people
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 are born with that sort of
talent
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 they might effortlessly shine in those particular
fields
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.
On the contrary
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, others believe that anyone could be a successful sportsperson or singer without born
talent
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 if they are taught. Those
people
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 do not need to be born with those talents but only by rigorous practice and dedication they can achieve their goals.
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, there
is
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 numerous examples in
this
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world
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 regarding
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 belief,
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 as in my country the cricketers do have their
talent
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 by inheritance or
birth
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 but they easily succeed through their hard work and perseverance.
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, I believe that becoming a successful
sportperson
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sportsperson
sport person
 or musician at least requires some inborn talents because
music
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 and sports are creative work and only hard work and training are not enough to be good in
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 field.
To conclude
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,
although
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 becoming successful in the creative
world
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 needs training and teaching, it needs some inborn
talent
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 for those who want to succeed in these
fields
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.

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coherence cohesion
Focus on diversifying your sentence structures to enhance reader engagement. Experiment with compound and complex sentences for a richer expression.
task achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure you balance both views discussed before expressing your opinion. Also, strive for a concluding paragraph that succinctly summarizes both sides and clearly states your stance with justification.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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