Some people believe that success comes from hard work. Others believe that success has to do with luck. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Give specific details and examples to support your opinion.

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Many people
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hard, but only a few succeed. We see
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especially in professions that are always in limelight,
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, in sports, movies, music, arts and theatre. So many athletes struggle on the field, but only a few gain glory.
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, certain oriental cultures adopt a fatalistic thought process. Based on
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, few people believe that indeed getting
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depends on
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. But, I strongly disagree with
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sentiment and firmly believe that
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depends on hard
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and perseverance. 'Fortune favours the brave', is a famous adage, which highlights the importance of efforts and determination. Dhirubhai Ambani, Steve Jobs, Narendra Modi are people with humble backgrounds. Yet, they have attained
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by their efforts. Sure, they have suffered setbacks and problems, but they overcame all challenges with enthusiasm and faith
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and eventually attained
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in their ventures. Yes ! Sometimes, one does not get the desired results despite giving effort while others effortlessly land a windfall. There is always an element of
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involved- the intrepid coach spots and recruits the talented but poor footballer, the talent scout listens to a diva by chance and recruits her, but even here, these individuals were practising for long hours before they were spotted. In conclusion, there is an apparent veneer of
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to every
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story, but the fact remains that every
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story is laced with hard
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and passion.
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, fear not and
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hard for lady
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is bound to visit the determined soul and bring
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with her.
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