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Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

#students #work #university #study #support #choice
Despite many tertiary students working
part
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part-time
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time
 or casual along with their
studies
, there are many others who think that working before going for higher
studies
 is sensible. From my own perspective,
studies
 coupled with jobs is the best choice as it helps prepare students for professional careers.
To begin
 with, many who study full
time
 or even
part
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part-time
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time
 and do odd jobs
such
 as a bartender, or perhaps in retail, gain valuable soft
skills
such
 as communication and leadership that are of much more
importance
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important
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 than technical or hard
skills
. These
skills
 are highly valued by
multinational
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organisation
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 and can be a decisive factor when hiring fresh graduates.
Additionally
, many who are working whilst studying have better
time
 management
skills
 and are able to multitask in comparison to those who only study.
Furthermore
, many hiring managers sitting at the top hierarchy of management in global corporation’s value those applications who have demonstrated any sort of work while they were at university. Preference is obviously given to those candidates who have some kind of experience because the
skills
 acquired in
those job
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that job
those jobs
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 may be transferable to many white-collar jobs.
Moreover
, many who work before starting university might have forgotten the many
skills
 they developed at work whilst being at the university
,
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 because they never used them. To recapitulate, the benefits of working whilst studying outweigh the advantages of working before studying.
Therefore
, I strongly support the notion that students should be working during their
studies
 to help them prepare for their careers.
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  • teamwork
  • communication
  • critical thinking
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  • career exploration
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