Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

Despite many tertiary students working
part
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time
or casual along with their
studies
, there are many others who think that working before going for higher
studies
is sensible. From my own perspective,
studies
coupled with jobs is the best choice as it helps prepare students for professional careers.
To begin
with, many who study full
time
or even
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time
and do odd jobs
such
as a bartender, or perhaps in retail, gain valuable soft
skills
such
as communication and leadership that are of much more
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than technical or hard
skills
. These
skills
are highly valued by
multinational
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organisation
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and can be a decisive factor when hiring fresh graduates.
Additionally
, many who are working whilst studying have better
time
management
skills
and are able to multitask in comparison to those who only study.
Furthermore
, many hiring managers sitting at the top hierarchy of management in global corporation’s value those applications who have demonstrated any sort of work while they were at university. Preference is obviously given to those candidates who have some kind of experience because the
skills
acquired in
those job
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may be transferable to many white-collar jobs.
Moreover
, many who work before starting university might have forgotten the many
skills
they developed at work whilst being at the university
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because they never used them. To recapitulate, the benefits of working whilst studying outweigh the advantages of working before studying.
Therefore
, I strongly support the notion that students should be working during their
studies
to help them prepare for their careers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preparation
  • mature
  • responsibility
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • career exploration
  • financial independence
  • work ethic
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