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Some people state that the national teams and an individual sportsman and sportswomen should be financially sponsored by the government or non-government body. how far do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The vast majority of the population deems that the
sports
 area should be financed by state departments or private organisations. I advocate strongly with
this
 position and am going to reflect on my essay my own view of
such
 a statement and provide arguments, which will confirm my opinion.
On the other hand
, we can observe that a large number of people is right.
First
 of all, a person tides over a difficult way in order to become a professional sportsman.
Therefore
,
such
 a person ought to concentrate on his training and achievements.
Likewise
, humans, who want to carry out
sports
 activities, should be supported by various organisations entirely.
For instance
, sport novices require certain expenses on food, accommodation, participating in world competitions.
Also
 noteworthy is that sportsmen must not spend money on these expenditures because they provide honour to their countries.
On the other hand
, society often alleges that contemporary teams or sportsmen are concerned about material rewards, rather than prizes or national pride. A more detailed look at
this
 trouble affords the population to conclude that the
sports
 area has been evolving in a politician or financial areas.
Hence
, governments should not highlight scholarships for
sports
 teams or encourage juveniles to embark on a sporting career.
Moreover
, organisations and local departments should be concerned about
this
 trouble among the modern notion of competitions or victories. To summarize, I would stress that the current
sports
 area is coherent with a profit or an income. I support definitely
this
 statement and my arguments prove it.
However
, sportsmen must decide upon for themselves why they want to participate in
sports
 activities.
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