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one of major issues facing world today is over population. What problem arise from this situation? What measures can be taken to deal with it?

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Nowadays, one of the most controversial issues is overpopulation in many
countries
. There are some problems which are coming up because of the overpopulation these are not having a shelter to live and
also
 rent prices is unaffordable.
However
, the bombshell news is that there are so many
countries
 where people may immigrate from overcrowded areas and
this
 could be the solution for
this
 problem. Unfortunately, not all have their own house to live in and of ,course it is due to overpopulation in the cities.
Moreover
, due to
this
issue
, in many areas renting a house is unbelievably expensive for especially medium-class citizens. 
For example
, in Indonesia, the situation is destabilized and
this
 country which population had already been overcrowded and reached its peak in 2010, and since that time their society living in, in unlivable conditions with no medical support and
also
 a lot of people sleep outdoors since they don't have their own home. Undoubtedly, there are several reasons why
this
issue
 is coming towards developing
countries
 but it is said that if human beings immigrate to developed
countries
such
 as Canada or the USA, there could help to solve
this
issue
 in some ways.
For instance
, most immigrants move alone to other developed
countries
 by leaving their home and family and It is
also
 believed that these individuals subsidize their family members by helping them financially. In conclusion, people are growing in number and these days it is of the main
issue
 in
this
 world. The following
issue
 brings with it some dilemmas
such
 as the growth of rent prices and lack of land to live in.
Nevertheless
, the good news is that individuals from overcrowded cities can move to developed cities which could be appropriate for them and they may
also
 find more opportunities for having a better life.
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