One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing . Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In the
last
decades, medicine and treatment technologies have been rising and the technologies support a long
life
for
people
. In fact, there are some advantages to human
life
,
on the other hand
,
this
long
life
has some disadvantages. I believe
,
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this
treatment and medicine have a gorgeous effect on the human world. In
this
essay, I would like to explain the good side and bad sides of medical care. Some technological improvement has shown us that the medical technologies have risen and it's support to living
time
of
people
,
also
this
time
has risen day by day and
people
could be happy.
Firstly
, because of a long lifetime,
people
can spend more
time
with their family, relatives or
people
who like them.
In addition
, when they spend
time
with your loved ones, they will be happy.
Finally
,
people
can learn more information as science, religion, philosophy etc. in
this
long
time
and they will be wise and they could speak about wisdom. For
this
reason, humanity could rise about science.
For instance
, if a scientist who has a brilliant brain will survive a long
time
, he can invent more devices that can help persons more. I support,
this
technological rising will be
made
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us better. On the other,
this
big lifetime has some bad effect on our world. In nature, some
people
should die and some
people
should be burned. If some
people
don't die in normal human
life
, the world will be crowded, so we will finish the source of the meet and water.
However
, we can solve
this
problem with technology and we can put some limits on reproduction like in China. In conclusion, technological improvement has some dangerous way and it is the same for medicine, but these developments have a lot of advantages as long and healthy
life
. In my opinion, we can fix some problems with science, so we should continue inventing some things.
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