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Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. What problem does this shortage cause? what measures could be taken to overcome these problems?

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Water
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 scarcity has become a pressing issue among the
countries
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 , which proves the urgent need to tackle the problem. As the number of
resources
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 that provide freshwater is decreasing the humans in some parts of the world suffered from dehydration that can eventually lead to losses of lives. and the operation of businesses and human activities have been affected. In order to control
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 situation, the contribution from the government as well as individuals and
organizations
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 play a vital role.The negative consequences of the shortage of freshwater mainly affect the health of
people
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 and the activities of
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, including civilians in the
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.
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,
people
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 from developing
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 or poor nations, especially malnourished populations rely on
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 for diet and the reduction of
water
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resources
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 can harm their health, and deal with the threats for survival.
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,
water
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 is essential for functioning the processes of certain factories since some factories or electricity generation are based on
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 energy so there are delays when there is no sufficient level of freshwater.
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, the majority of
people
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 utilize
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 in
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 as doing laundry, washing cars, and dishes and taking shower, and without much
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water
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people
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 are struggled to perform those tasks.
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, African
countries
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 are suffering from the negative effects of
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water
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resources
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 as the poor citizens are striving hand to deal with their own family diet and restrict themselves to performing household chores.
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, ample
water
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resources
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 important for humans.
On the other hand
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, governments along with citizens and
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 can work collaboratively to solve
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 as a global problem. Governments should restrict the usage of
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 by-laws and procedures;
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 ,Individuals can limit their
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 usage.
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,
organizations
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 and
people
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 can work on campaigns to advocate for
people
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 about
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 alarming issue and suggest ideas to save
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.
For instance
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, the Singapore government controls the usage of
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 effectively through the distribution of
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 in tape helping the country to be sustainable . In conclusion, the lack of
freshwaterwater
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freshwater water
fresh water water
resources
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 is a global problem that should not be overlooked as it is crucial to both
people
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 and
organizations
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 in the
countries
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. The participation of individuals and
organizations
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 in the rules set by the government as well as the programs aimed to resolve the issue can help to some extent.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water scarcity
  • irrigation
  • contaminated
  • waterborne diseases
  • ecosystems
  • biodiversity
  • pandemics
  • economic downturn
  • social unrest
  • food security
  • resource management
  • conservation efforts
  • sustainable
  • desalination
  • rainwater harvesting
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