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Some people beleive that eventually all jobs will be done by artifical robots. What is your opinion?

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Artificial
robots
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 are progressively replacing humans in the workforce. While it is possible that, all menial
jobs
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 will be eventually done by
robots
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, it is unlikely that
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jobs
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 that require human contact will be taken over.
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jobs
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 will be carried out by people.
Robots
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 may eventually replace all human labour that does not require specific and complex human skills. Many companies will turn to artificial intelligence
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 because it is far less expensive than hiring training and imploying a human. In supermarkets in Australia
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 many cashiers have been replaced by automated stations that cost far less than employees.
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, these automated stations work around the clock and require no holiday so holiday pay. For these reasons
jobs
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 that can be replaced by robotic intelligence will be replaced.
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, there are some human
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 that can not be replaced because
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 will never achieve the capacity to do them. Put simply, some
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 require a human touch, these
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 include psychology, education, medicine and social work to name but a few.
Robots
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 will never be able to achieve what has taken social evolution hundreds of 1000 years to achieve. It is increasingly likely that
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robots
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 will end most human employment. Unskilled labour will eventually be done entirely by
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.
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 sophisticated
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 that require
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 skills will always exist. Ultimately very few
Jobs
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 will be safe in an increasingly artificially intelligent workforce.
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 it is vital to gain specific that can not be replaced by
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