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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Overpopulation becomes is a massive problem in urban areas these days. Individuals and government both are responsible to tackle
this
 obstacle. Here, in
this
 essay, I will mention the plethora of problems and a few optimum solutions in the forthcoming lines. To commence with, there are various fundamental problems are caused because of exceeding population in the municipality,
first
 of all, the unemployment rate is booming day by day
as a result
 crime is blowing much in the cities. To epitome, in the year ,2012 there was a big robbery happened in the bank of India in Mumbai which caused many causalities.
In addition
, the pollution rate is escalating every day
as a result
 the masses are getting a dangerous disease.
For instance
 in the big ,cities the air quality is very poor rather than in rural areas so in
this
 case, people are getting more sick eventually. To cope with
this
 trouble, the government and the public should take steps to overcome
this
 considerable issue.
Firstly
, the government should do arrangements for jobs and employment so that people do not need to move to cities.
Moreover
, the authority needs to build schools and universities with hostels in remote spaces as consequences people will love to move and stay in the remote areas.
Additionally
, the public should come forward to enhance their local work priorities
likewise
 agriculture and dairy products in that case community will get work at their own place so they do not move to another place to get jobs or employment to survive. To recapitalise, it can observe that if the public and law will take appropriate steps to tackle
this
 problem
then
 it's so easy to survive in the metropolis for normal humans.
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