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Your neighbour has animals and they cause noise. Write a letter - Describe the situation - Suggestion to solve the problem - Tell him what will you do if he will not solve the problem

#neighbour #animals #noise #situation #suggestion
Hello Smith, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. My name is Jennifer and I have recently moved to apartment number 31, right the one
besides
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 your apartment. I am sorry to say
this
 but I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about my unhappiness
for
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with
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 being your neighbour. It seems like you happen to have three cats and a dog at your place. It breaks my heart to say it but your pets are very noisy. Since I am a
work from home
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 employee, it causes lots of problems for me. Sometimes, it is very hard for me to concentrate in my meetings with all the background noises. If you would not mind can I suggest something for your animals ? I would really appreciate
if
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 you could sign them up for pet
day care
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 homes
instead
 of leaving them alone in the apartment.
Otherwise
, I am afraid I might have to involve the secretary of the building in
this
 matter. I really hope you can understand my situation and take the suggestion. Waiting for your response.
Yours'
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 Sincerely, Jennifer
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task response
To improve task response, provide more specific details about the noise disturbance. For instance, mention the times of day when the noise is most problematic or describe specific incidents.
coherence and cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, ensure smoother transitions between paragraphs. For example, instead of starting a paragraph with a conditional statement, begin with a brief summary of the problem discussed previously.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriate, creating a respectful tone throughout the letter.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a respectful and empathetic tone while addressing the issue, which is important for preserving a good relationship with a neighbour.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making the letter easy to follow.
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