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It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both ideas by giving your opinion.

#people #talents #music #sport #child #sports #person #musician
People have different options regarding what makes truly a person a good performance or a god gifted
skills
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. Some people believe that including me, giving the right guidance to children can help them to become a good
sportsman
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 or artistic. It is unquestionable that some inhabitants have  extraordinary skills from birth and they do not have
necessity
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the necessity
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 to practice or 
learning
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learn
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 from other ones. For 
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, people are born with various talents 
such
 as
specialist
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specialists
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 to influence another person, 
thus
 they  become a good leader, 
besides
 some has singing  skills because of 
this
 they make their career as a  musician and others becoming a good player,  owing to 
blessing
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the blessing
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 of good.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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