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Some students take one year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to travel or to work. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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When they finish school, teenagers face the choice of whether to take a
gap
year
 or continue their education. In my view, I believe that the advantages of taking one
year
 off outweigh the disadvantages. The argument in favour of continuing studies rather than taking a
gap
year
 would be that it seems more efficient. Students who choose to go to university straight can get guaranteed before the
people
 taking a
gap
year
.
As a result
, they can find a job and become independent earlier than others. What’s more, some
people
 may think that it
also
 wastes money if students
use
 one
year
 to travel.
However
, I think taking a
gap
year
 can be more beneficial. There are several reasons for choosing a
gap
year
.
Firstly
, it gives young
people
 chances to know the real society before they go to university. Because they can
use
 a
year
 to meet other
people
 expect for classmates and teachers and they need tackle all kinds of problems by themselves.
As a result
, they can learn some precise experience from others and become more mature and independent in mental.
Secondly
, teenagers can find their real interests and have a clear goal in
this
 way. Compare to those who go to university straight after high school, they have enough to decide their major to learn and they get more opportunities through doing different kinds of work. In conclusion, while some
people
 believe that taking a
gap
year
 wastes time, I would argue that it is better for students to take one
year
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