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A person' s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is true that
people
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 are judged based on their social
status
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 and personal
wealth
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 nowadays, and traditional
values
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such
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 as integrity and honesty are being forgotten. To a certain extent, I would agree with the fact that
people
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 are valued based on their
wealth
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 and
status
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 these days, but I
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 believe that old fashioned
values
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 still play an important part in our societies. It is believed that we are living in the pop culture and materialistic era these days, as the public judge each individual based on his/her social
status
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 and
wealth
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. It can be seen from how celebrities become famous nowadays. Many celebrities are being popular because of their physical appearance and personal
wealth
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 as Kim Kardashian. Her reality television program never shows any world-class acting quality, but only shows about her luxurious mansions and fancy cars. And
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 there are other celebrities who are well known due to their social
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 as the son or the daughter of a wealthy family. One of the examples would be Paris Hilton.
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 she has many bad attitudes, she is still popular because she inherits the assets of her parents.
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 traditional
values
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such
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 as respect others, being responsible, honesty and integrity seem to be forgotten nowadays, they still play an important part in many communities. In common cases, employers are still assessing their potential employees based on their hard-working attitude, positive behaviour and their integrity. And
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 business
people
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 are still looking for business partners who are reliable, can be trusted, and dependable.
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, it is important for adults to educate their children about these positive
values
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 because they still play an essential part in the societies. In conclusion, even though
people
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 are judged based on their
wealth
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 and social
status
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 nowadays, I do believe that old fashioned
values
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such
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 as honour, respect and trust cannot be eliminated from our daily lives.
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 we must teach our young generation about these cultures, in order for them to survive and succeed in the future.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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