Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

A certain number of
people
state that, recently, an increasing number of
choices
makes their decisions harder.
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options can cause confusion and depression.
To begin
with, too many
choices
make
one
who needs to make a decision
hestitates
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hesitates

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of the best
choices
. In the past, since we all had limited
choices
, selecting an option was
simple
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because there were few situations to compare.
However
, nowadays, there are plenty of
choices
to choose
and
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no
one
can guarantee the best
one
.
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, buying a coffee today requires customers to select
a
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size of their coffee. Sometimes,
this
choice
is difficult and easy to be persuaded.
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,
for
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100 years ago, we had only a single shot of coffee. Customers didn't have a chance to hesitate for other
choices
.
Moreover
, excessive
choices
can depress citizens in societies. Everyone want to select the best
choice
they have,
otherwise
, they might feel a failure. A variety of
choices
makes
people
in societies compare their sense of making a good decision to
one
another, whereas, in the past, these
people
didn't have
choices
to
be hesitated
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hesitate
have hesitated

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.
For instance
, there are many methods of diet. Each person suits a different procedure.
On the other hand
, only a partial number of
people
succeeds in losing weight.
Therefore
, those
people
who don't archive tend to compare themselves to
the
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other
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others

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. To summarise, overwhelming options
makes
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difficult decisions because everyone wants to make the best
choice
but onone know which
choice
is the best before they
make
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itmake

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.
In addition
, these can make
people
have a mental illness.
Consequently
,
this
essay totally agrees that we have essisive
choice
these days.
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