Traffic congestion and housing problems in larger cities could be solved by moving large industries and factories and their employees to the rural areas. What extent do you agree or disagree ?

There is no denying the fact that the presence of big
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and their workers is important.
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it is a commonly held belief that they should stay in the countryside or any area away from big
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, especially the capital city, there is
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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that the availability of them has benefits for large
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and we have to keep them in them.
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with, removing employees who work in big industries away from
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is unfair to them and will create many problems in many ways because they are a lot, so any changes in their lifestyle will have an impact on society.
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, they will have a low quality of life, and their safety will be in danger because of the lack of services in the rural area.
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, their presence has a good impact on the city’s economy. A lot of them spend their salaries on local people’s services and local activities, which will improve economic activities, especially since most of them earn a lot of money.
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statistics conducted in Riyadh city, factory workers and their families contribute to increasing the consumption rate, which leads to creating job opportunities. Another point to consider, putting them away will make the job harder, so that will decrease the number of people who want to work in
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. The
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will be forced to increase
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salaries, and they will put a large part of their budget into transportation, which leads to many issues,
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as rising costs of many products, poor production, lack of
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, and monopoly of large companies in industry. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that
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and their employees play a big role in society, so they should be in large
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