Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe, that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In order to be a better member of the society whether the
parents
should be responsible or the
school
has been debatable always. In my
opinion
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both play an equal inevitable role. It is considered that not only
parents
are a child's
first
guardian, but
also
their
first
teachers
.
Alongwith
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the looks inherited, the habits, behaviour and etiquette are
also
transferred.
However
,
parents
need to teach
children
for being
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better
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.
First
of all, to respect the elderly. To greet everyone with a smile, so that they feel
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.
Secondly
, to help each other whenever in need.
This
not only builds a helping nature but spreads joy to both the
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and receiver.
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,
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highest education should be acquired.
This
tends to
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job and handsome income, which makes the child even more confident and responsible; making both family and society a better place to live in.
On the other hand
, schools have their own part.
Children
often spend seven to eight hours in
school
. The atmosphere in
school
surrounded by
teachers
and friends has a great influence on
children
. Each morning starts with a prayer followed by a uniform and hygiene check.
This
is to maintain health and to have faith in God. Discipline and punctuality are priorities in
school
.
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Along with
education ,
teachers
also
focus on enhancing creativity in kids.
Hence
, inculcating an interest in some art which in future might be chosen as a profession.
Also
,
habit
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of sincerity and honesty is taught. Sincerity is appreciated by schools in the form of certificates and trophies awarded to hardworking pupils. And, honesty in apologizing for mistakes. To sum up, not only
parents
build a good society member out of
children
but an equal, dependent and unavoidable role is played by
teachers
as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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