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In their advertising ,bussinesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way . Why is this ?do think is it a positive or negative development ?

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Nowadays ,businesses are emphasised with advertising which provides new goods in several routes .It will be discussed in the essay .From my perspective ,
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 development might be seen as a negative due to some reasons . The main reason is the marketing strategy to allure more consumers .In other meanings ,when the new goods are distinguished with new features ,individuals are attracted by the brand .
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 ,not a special item becomes popular but other
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 under that brand catch more consumers .There is a good example ,the icepack company ,which has delicious ice cream ,is produced some new items and other older types of ice cream under its brand are seen . Notwithstanding ,providing new characteristics of
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 in advertisement can be considered a negative development .To elaborate more ,in a long time ,there will not be any original goods to be seen because of the latest
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 which developed too much .
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 , the communities lost several valuable
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 because of their too much advertising and do not comply with the ads laws.
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 ,it is difficult to find traditional Thai desserts to eat in Bangkok or rural food in the north of Iran in Chaloos city .
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 ,boba tea and Italian pudding are prevalent . To sum up ,a huge number of companies are trying to indicate new traits of their commodities in order to attract consumers .
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 function can fade away the culture of the product .
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 ,I believed that
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 development is a negative approach definitely .
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