A Canadian friend recently sent you a present by post. You want to thank him/her. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -say how you felt when you received the present -describe what you like about it -explain how you will use the present

Dear Lele,

Hello

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my sweetie, I am writing to tell you about your gift that I received from you yesterday. I am so grateful for your present; I could not believe it when I saw it! It was my favourite album; I have always tried to purchase it, but it is always sold out quickly! I really like it; it is a famous album by Taylor Swift! It has all my favourite songs on it, especially "Love Story"; it is my best song! I will use the CD when I drive; I will listen to the songs.

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, when I am in my room, I will listen to the CD. It is the best gift I have received in my life. Thank you very much for your gift. Kind regards Lolo

lulu221221

Jul 8, 2025

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Try to add a little more detail about your feelings when you received the present.

coherence and cohesion

Consider using linking words to connect your ideas better.

coherence and cohesion

Make sure each paragraph focuses on one clear idea to improve clarity.

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You expressed your gratitude very well.

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Your enthusiasm for the gift is clear and joyful.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

131 words

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A Canadian friend recently sent you a present by post. You want to thank him/her. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -say how you felt when you received the present -describe what you like about it -explain how you will use the present

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

Due to the influence of worldwide media such as television and computers, the gap between cultures is decreasing. The introduction of this global culture is a great benefit to the world. To what extent do you agree with this viewpoint?

Nowadays more and more young people hold the important positions in the government. Some people think that it is a good thing，while others argue that it is not suitable. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?