A Canadian friend recently sent you a present by post. You want to thank him/her. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -say how you felt when you received the present -describe what you like about it -explain how you will use the present

Dear Lele,
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my sweetie, I am writing to tell you about your gift that I received from you yesterday. I am so grateful for your present; I could not believe it when I saw it! It was my favourite album; I have always tried to purchase it, but it is always sold out quickly! I really like it; it is a famous album by Taylor Swift! It has all my favourite songs on it, especially "Love Story"; it is my best song! I will use the CD when I drive; I will listen to the songs.
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, when I am in my room, I will listen to the CD. It is the best gift I have received in my life. Thank you very much for your gift. Kind regards Lolo

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Try to add a little more detail about your feelings when you received the present.
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You expressed your gratitude very well.
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Your enthusiasm for the gift is clear and joyful.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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