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Topic: Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree?

#topic #meat #diet
Certainly, to remain healthy in life, a nutritious
diet
 play a pivotal role.
However
, people love to eat green vegetables in their feast because they are vegetarian and they is no need to eat a non-vegetarian
diet
 to remain healthy. I firmly agree with the aforementioned statement which I will elucidate in the subsequent paragraphs with relevant examples. To commence with, every creature has a rudimentary right as humans to enjoy their full life whether it is fish, chick or goat.
Thus
, human has no right to die for fulfilling their own nutrients of their
body
 because he has a plethora of things to eat to meet their
body
 demands
such
 as fruits , vegetables, milk and juices, etcetera.
For instance
, I am a vegetarian since my childhood and I never become sick and my nutrients and vitamins are in an adequate amount in my
body
.
Furthermore
, irrefutably, eggs are a good source of proteins but if people try to die hens and chicks for their own benefits
then
 in future it will affect the
food
 web because nature has its own
food
 chain to balance the ecosystem. To exemplify it, the frog eats mosquitos, and the snake's
diet
 is frog and birds
such
 as owls and hawks like to eat snakes in
such
 a way there is a natural
food
 chain.
Hence
, if we start to pray frogs to fulfil our
diet
then
 what snake will be going to eat and in a similar way the whole conglomerate will be affected by it and at the ,end it has a menacing impact on nature. Agglomerating, all the points elaborated above people should try to eat the
food
that is
 recommended by
food
 chain to us
that is
 plants and vegetables and dairy products, these sufficient to provide us with the essential vitamins, carbohydrates, proteins, minerals which are needed by our
body
 to remain fit and healthy.
Hence
, it is a good idea to become a herbivore
instead
 of an omnivore.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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