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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teacher. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#parents #teacher #support
Nowadays, owing to our globalized world the most important thing to be a good person is the Education for
children
. While some
people
 think that educating at school is the best way for kids, others believe that
parents
 could be the best tutor. I completely agree with the
second
 statement because
parents
 have the possibility to teach easily different
skills
 in order to develop a child to be more confident.
Firstly
, the way that
people
 educate
children
 is important to
skills
 development and
parents
 should teach the capacity to solve specific problems in different situations
such
 as knowing how
children
 feel in their learning process.
For instance
,
parents
 know when their
children
 feel frustrated which would help them overcome any adversity. For
this
 reason,
children
 should develop more confidence and encourage them to learn quickly. Another point to consider is building moral values which will probably result in
children
 developing empathy for each other and they are able to help
people
 which is necessary to have a better world.
In other words
,
parents
 who are teaching
children
 will have sons and daughters with emotional
skills
 that should help them to learn to be confident
people
, it will ensure that
children
 grow up to incorporate new values.
Furthermore
, some research indicated that kids that grow up with emotional intelligence have the capacity to learn better than
children
 that have not developed
this
 emotional area. In conclusion,
having
Change preposition
by having
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 good
people
 with
emotional
Change the adjective
emotionally
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intelligent
Replace the word
intelligence
show examples
, moral values and
skills
 like empathy, we could have a better world in which
parents
 are most the important teacher for
children
 because they know exactly how their sons and daughters are.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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