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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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After globalization,
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international student exchange programs are increasing rapidly. Some teachers believe
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 action would be advantageous for all teenage academic pupils. I reckon
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 the benefits of collaboration and knowledge expansion will outweigh the drawbacks. We will discuss
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, foreign study life has many cons like, communication barriers, adapting to the new culture and so on... it's indeed an advantage for the children's bright future. In today's world, a mandatory
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 skill is collaborating with others, nowadays, kids have very limited exposure
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 to overcome the fear of approaching new people, who are from different regions.
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, my brother had an opportunity to go foreign for studies at a young age. Though he had some trouble at the initial stages, he tackled everything and that experience enabled his problem-solving skills. Now, he is an MD in an MNC company and he is working
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 life as an international junior experience added
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significant value to his skills.
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, the programs improve the students' view of the world. When pupils study with other sovereign pupils, they get the opportunity to adapt
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moved to the US, my data science was limited, all had was theory education but the people
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in my class had a lot of experience through field trips;
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 the education of reality. Being friends with them I got my
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 to learn my lessons.
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, despite many disadvantages, students indeed, benefit from foreign student exchange programs. In order to secure their future, the kids can easily manage the drawbacks.
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Task Response
Ensure all aspects of the topic are addressed clearly in the essay. Provide a balanced discussion on both advantages and disadvantages of international student exchange programs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Maintain a clear and logical progression of ideas throughout the essay. Use transition words and phrases to connect sentences and paragraphs effectively.
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