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Band 4.5

:in the future,nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 era of technology economy,
information
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 online is transferred faster and wider online than through traditional
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medias
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. More and more
people
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 choose to get
information
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 online for free. Some
people
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 worry that nobody will choose paper-based
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 anymore. From my point of view, I do not think that
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 will lose their positions. In the
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 before
internet
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 developed, the only way for
public
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 to get
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 and knowledge is through printed newspapers and books. News cannot be announced immediately since newspapers require time to edit and print.
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 in the past usually get to know
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information
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 the
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 day by paying for a newspaper.
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people
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 who like reading always choose to buy books from bookshops or
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 to
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. Inconvenience existed due to
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 the development of
internet
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the internet
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, e-books and new
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medias
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 have been
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launched
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lunched
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 online, spreading fast and wide.
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 leads the public to approach
information
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 easier. Some
people
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 may abandon those traditional resources. As far as I know, e-books are not updated and new enough due to the authors’ copyright. Most of the free e-books are old fashioned without meeting the demand of younger
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, reading lovers may prefer to choose the paper ones in order to get the latest knowledge. News of course is spread faster online than offline.
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are
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 able to know what is going on
on
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 the world in time. But,
newspaper
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 has its own importance even now and in the future.
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, It is a good way for leisure when we are holding a newspaper along with a cup of tea.
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, paper books and newspapers are more friendly to the old since they are
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 to get eyes related diseases. To conclude, new ways of
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 is popular for many
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 while traditional
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also
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 play an important role. These two ways could coexist in our lives.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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