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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that it might be predicted a
lot
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 data about cultures and characters of each individual by observing their clothing
styles
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 and choices by some sort of
people
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. I
defitinitly
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definitely
belief
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to
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this
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 statement and give some
evidences
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evidence
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 to these arguments below. Regarding
to
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the cultures, clothing
styles
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 are exactly deeply connected with cultures.
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, each person has its own cultural
clothes
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 related to their particular religion and places where they live in.
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: Arab
people
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 can be easily separated
with
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 their way of clothing. Because their
clothes
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 are really simple, closed and has
unique
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a unique
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 style in
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 existing world that it will not be a big deal to know about that they are
from
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 Arab nationality.
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, a group of
people
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 who are European from countries that include France, Italy or Germany, has
huge
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a huge
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 difference that they prefer to
be wear
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be worn
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 with
type
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the type
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 of
styles
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that is
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 narrow conditions.
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, wearing
clothes
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also
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 can reveal the character of
people
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. Because every individual
wear
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wears
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clothes
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 that
connected
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are connected
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 with their own characteristics.
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,
people
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 who are extremely calm and introverted as well want to be worn with black and white colours.
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, who prefer to be at the centre of attention, bright coloured
clothes
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 are their dominant
styles
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.
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, they choose
such
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kind
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kinds
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 of
clothes
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 in order to get pleasure and
compliment
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compliments
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 from
coward
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a coward
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. To sum up, culture and characters have incredibly essential roles to know and observe more data about
people
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. So,
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, it can be really easy to set up new communication and friendship when we come across with new community after some information about them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • garments
  • traditional attire
  • sartorial choices
  • expressive style
  • cultural identity
  • psychological implications
  • non-verbal cues
  • globalization
  • perceptions
  • professional demeanor
  • societal norms
  • economic constraints
  • subcultures
  • fashion movements
  • individualism
  • stereotype
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