The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In the modern world, technology has been improved dramatically in more developed countries. The governments of developed countries use

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technology for tracking and monitoring citizens' activity on personal devices

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as mobile phones or laptops almost without even realizing it. I think that citizens do not want to be monitored involuntarily.

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with, there are so many individuals who live alone and have to take care of themselves in modern countries. If these people experienced unfortunate events

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as disease and burglary, the government that monitorize individuals would be informed,

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sending help like ambulances and police.

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, surveillance could help to prevent crime and reduce the crime rate in states that actively use technology

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as security cameras, GPS.

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, cities would be safer than before and society would live peacefully.

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, monitoring without realizing it could lead to a feeling of unfreedom.

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, people could feel pressured and stressed because they think that they are being tracked by the government all the time. They try to be more careful when they act.

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,when a citizen organized a party with his friend, he would think that he would commit an

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if he used illegal drugs.

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, monitoring humans could violate privacy. People could not carry out a daily routine like taking shower, changing dresses under the feeling of spying. In conclusion, tracking by the government could provide humans who live alone detect unfortunate events and

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help prevent and reduce criminal events.

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, it causes individuals to feel insecure about their private life. I believe that it is important that society has a right to live in privacy.

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