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Some experts believe that it is better for a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some experts are of the opinion that foreign
language
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 at primary
schools
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 does better than at the secondary
schools
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. Early introduction of new
language
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 in primary
schools
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 helps with expanding thinking horizons at an early stage of development, and I think the advantages of
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 far more outweigh the disadvantages. In primary
schools
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' brains of students are more flexible and have faster-grasping power and understanding for new things. Early introduction to a foreign
language
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 will open their thought limits and scope of thinking beyond the boundaries of the nation. They get information about new
culture
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 and civilisation in their primary years which provides better learning opportunities and exposure to foreign
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 and traditions.
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 with learning ,English they get used to the English trend of socialisation and work
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 and food and dressing sense.Parent and teachers respect and the way of expressing respect is different.
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 early exposure to
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 and other etiquettes ,in some ,cases shows the negative impact on their own
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 and beliefs as well as familial structure
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 they start ignoring their own customs and traditions in the favour of foreign
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. These brains are not mature enough to decide which is better for them and if it is forced by teaching institutes
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 there will be a conflict of interests for parents and the organisations. In ,conclusion exposing to foreign languages and traditions in childhood is better for a child's overall development, if there will be a well-guided syllabus and support is available with proper training and explanation.

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