More and more people are seriously overweight. Some people suggest the solution to this problem is to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the widespread use of unhealthy foods has become common, and the number of
people
who suffer from obesity has increased. Consequently
, several people
are argued that this
problem should be solved by raising the price
of fattening foods. I strongly disagree with this
idea for several reasons.
First
of all, it is not justly to increase the price
of foodstuff in order to encounter obesity. People
from all walks of life purchase fast food
like hamburgers, pizza, and French fries. As a result
, People
who live in deprived areas are unable to buy them forever, but people
who belong to the affluent of society can buy them without any problems. This
solution is not good for vulnerable groups of society. For example
, children who live in low-income families are the first
victim of this
issue.
Secondly
, one of the most important recreational activities and gatherings is eating junk food
. And this
gathering assists people
to keep in touch and socialize. If the price
of fast food
increases, numerous people
, especially young people
, are unable to go out and hang out with their peers. This
limitation leads to depressions. For example
, students have low incomes, and they are not capable of paying for fast food
products at a high price
.
In conclusion, this
solution leads to discrimination among citizens of society, and some people
face a problem in their lives because they cannot afford to buy it forever, and I think training people
is the best way to tackle it.Submitted by royahabibiazad on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
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- moreover
- also
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- however
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- even though
- despite