Watching television has positive effects on children. Do you agree or disagree with the statement
Television is an instrument
which
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that
exhibit
various kind of programme, news, and entertainment to Change the verb form
exhibits
different
kind of generation. Generally according to the recent publication by famous Change the article
a different
TV
company mentioning that at-least half hour in a day
people watch TV
for various purpose. However
, children
tend to watch TV
for several hours
in day
become a negative habit for them, Add an article
the day
therefore
I am strongly disagree
and express that it yields a more negative effect on them because of following reasons.There are
When Change the verb form
strongly disagree
children
start to spend a lot of hours
in
watching Change preposition
apply
TV
then
day-by
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day-by-day
day
their start to lose their Correct your spelling
eyesight
eye sight
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eyesight
power
and where it lead
to wear Change the verb form
leads
power
glass at
during their early childhood Change preposition
apply
period
. For an
example if we take 10 Correct article usage
apply
student
as a sample in a Change to a plural noun
students
class room
we can figure out at least 3 to 4 Correct your spelling
classroom
children
wearing power
glass, moreover
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,moreover
this
count is a growing pattern.
Replace the word
Imagine
Imaging
that a child Correct your spelling
Imagine
spend
nearly 5 to 6 Change the verb form
spends
hours
to watch
programme or other interesting areas Change the verb form
watching
then
he doesn't
have enough time
in a day
to focus on other main things which are important during those
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that period
those periods
period
. For an
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apply
example
they don'Add a comma
,example
t
have enough time
to recall what teacher
taught in the Correct article usage
the teacher
class room
which may affect their education as well as generate poor grading Correct your spelling
classroom
position
in the class.
Fix the agreement mistake
positions
Morevoer
, Correct your spelling
Moreover
children
during their early childhood period
can develop many skills, for
example
can learn about how to play cricket or football, how to sing a song, but if they start to give huge Add the comma(s)
,example
time
to watching TV
programme then
they cann'
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can't
t
develop those required skill
and later may feel Change the determiner
that required skill
those required skills
worry
about that Change the verb form
worried
their
lose their valuable Replace the word
they're
they are
time
without doing anything.
However
, due to our current education system children
may feel so much of
stress from the Change preposition
apply
time
of entering the school to leave, where teachers and parents start to focus their children
to achieve few thing
which Change to a plural noun
things
are
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is
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actually
actual
not valuable or not bring any meaning to their life. Add the comma(s)
,actual
Therefore
watching TV
for few
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a few
hours
during their freetime
may give Correct your spelling
free time
high
level of Add an article
a high
satifaction
and stress relief.
In conclusion, I brief that watching Correct your spelling
satisfaction
TV
for a
several Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
hours
of time
may reduce the eye power
of children
in their early childhood period
, moreover
, don't
have enough time
to re study
subjects and feeling lacking to develop Add a hyphen
re-study
unique
skill for an example- playing cricket, football, and singing song when they can develop. Add an article
a unique
the unique
However
because of Add a comma
,However
high
level of Add an article
the high
a high
pressure
they are absorbing daily it Add a comma
,pressure
become
a stress relief to them. Change the verb form
becomes
Therefore
with the proper guidelines from their parents or other people use to watch only a few hours
in a day
if not it will harm your body initially
then
drippling
your life in Correct your spelling
dripping
dropping
longer
term.Add an article
the longer
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