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More and more people are seriously overweight. Some people suggest the solution to this problem is to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #price #foods
In
this
 modern era and the gut's responsive bleat,
people
 today have been completely dependent on fast
food
.
However
,
this
 transient decoy comes with its ramifications. I would differ from the viewpoint presented by the masses. I shall profound by views on
this
 issue. The primary causative effect of fast
food
 is obesity which leads to numerous health issues like heart attack, stroke and polycystic ovarian diseases which is common in
this
 era of females. Consumption of fast
food
 or ready-made
food
 is more common in
people
 whose working schedule is stretched and they do not get time to cook their meals. So they completely depend upon fast
food
. Increasing the prices of fattening foods by applying more taxes on them will not stop
people
 to consume these types of
food
. Most of the time surveys have found that the upper and average middle class are consuming more and they hardly get affected if the government increases the price. Applying taxes on fast
food
 on fast
food
 is not a solution.
However
, we can educate the masses about the consequences of fast
food
 consumption. Government should start a health campaign, In which they should teach the masses about a healthy lifestyle, good diet intake , exercise etc.It is mostly seen in the young generation as they love to consume fast
food
 and they love to give minor treats.Government should make a healthy campaign too on a healthy lifestyle at college, so the young generation will come to know about the health hazards of consuming fast
food
 frequently.
Hence
, to conclude, we may say that increasing the prices and making junk foods expensive couldn’t go in alignment with the idea of keeping
people
 fit and healthy. so
people
 should focus on exercise and a healthy diet to keep them fit .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • fattening foods
  • calorie-dense
  • healthier food choices
  • taxation
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • subsidies
  • nutritional education
  • public health campaigns
  • nanny state
  • individual's right
  • consumer behavior
  • preventative measures
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