Some people think we need to give aid to all poor countries. Others, however, argue that we should not give international aid to countries with corruption in their system. Discuss both views and provide your own opinion.

Some
people
hold the opinion that
aid
should be given to all the impoverished
countries
,
whereas
others say that help should not be provided to those
countries
which have
corruption
in their administration. In
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I intend to discuss both perspectives. I believe all poor
countries
should be provided
aid
but to ensure that it reaches the poor
people
it should be in non-monetary form. There are many reasons why some
people
say that all poor
countries
should be supported by
aid
.
Firstly
, international
aid
is not only given to reduce poverty
,
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but
also
to improve the donor country’s own security. By giving
aid
, the economic condition of the poor
countries
improves and so the conditions that promote terrorism,
such
as poverty, unemployment and
corruption
are removed. So,
this
aid
promotes peace and stability in the whole world.
On the other hand
, those who say that
countries
with
corruption
should not be helped give their main reason that all the
aid
given will not reach the
people
for whom the
aid
is meant
for
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. It may go into corrupt pockets.
Secondly
, it would make those
people
lazy, as they would be getting paid without doing any work.
Thirdly
, the
aid
may be used for
wrong
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purposes.
For example
, the
aid
may be given for development projects but it may be used to promote terrorism. I believe that the best way to help poor
countries
would be to provide non-monetary
aid
, as it would reach the
people
it is meant for.
For example
, good educational institutes, good health centres and job opportunities can be created for
people
of
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poor
countries
.
Furthermore
, it would leave no scope for the corrupt politicians to siphon the funds away and ensure that the
people
in need are actually benefited.
To sum up
, international
aid
should be given to all poor
countries
, but if there is
corruption
it should not be in the form of monetary funds.
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