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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

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The chart describes how many
hours
 per week both men and women of different employment
status
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statuses
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 spend on their
creation
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 activities between 1998 and 1999. It is obviously clear to see that the highest amount of
leisure
 time is enjoyed by those who were unemployed and retired. Not only full-time but
also
 part-time employed persons spent the least number of
leisure
hours
.
In addition
, there were no figures given for males who are employed part-time as well as housewives. Both unemployed and retired males enjoyed the highest amount of
hour
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 of
leisure
, approximately 80
hours
 per week, whereas females of these groups had around 75
hours
. The
second
 group was female housewives who spent 55
hours
 of
leisure
, on average, compared with 40
hours
 for women who were part-time employed. The least group was those who were employed full-time. Among
this
 group, men had on average 50
hours
 of
leisure
, slightly higher than women who only had 37
hours
 of
leisure
.
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