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In some cultures old age is more valued, while in other cultures youth is more valued. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#cultures #age #youth
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 traditions,senior citizens are given more importance.
Conversely
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,in some ,cultures
youngsters
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 are given more priority in comparison with the older community.As far as my views are concerned.I personally believe that the old generation public must be valued more.
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,I would like to explicate both the points in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with,there are myriad factors influencing my point of view.The
first
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 and foremost is the belief of an individual to
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 the older section of culture.To explain it,it is the customs and tradition of the company which makes them give respect to their elder community.For ,instance in a
country
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 like India,older citizens are given more
value
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 because they consider it as their moral duty.In spite of having more state of
youngsters
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 particular cultures give more preference to older civilization. On the flip side, another section of the nation gives more
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 to the youth despite giving more importance to the youngster.
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,some individuals give the opinion that
youngsters
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 are an asset to the
country
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.
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,the economy of the
country
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 is dependent upon the younger section of the world.For ,example a survey was conducted by the BBC which shows that the
youngsters
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 have the potential to convert a developing
country
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 into a developed nation.Not only the growing economies should
value
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 their youth but
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 it is the responsibility of humanity to provide guidance and support to the
youngsters
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 for the development of the nation. In conclusion,I would like to say that different people think differently.In
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 particular case
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, as a whole,we cannot support or go against either of the sides completely,but I think that the older populace of the society must be given more importance.
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