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It is often said that we should work to live, not live to work. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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Most
people
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 in the world have to find
jobs
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, some
people
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 think that we should
work
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 to live but not live to
work
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,
this
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 essay will discuss both views and
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this
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 view. On the one hand, there are two reasons why we should live to
work
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. The main reason is that
live
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living
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 to
work
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 means
people
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 love their
jobs
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 so much that there is no clear line between
work
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 and personal life.
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, some scientists love their
jobs
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 so much that they are willing to put most of their time into experiments. Another reason is that it can enhance the development of society. If everyone lives to
work
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, they will put more effort
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 their
jobs
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 as they think their lives are only for working.
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, the working efficiency can be increased.
On the other hand
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, there are two reasons why we should
work
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 to live.
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,
people
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 can be motivated to
work
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. When they
work
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 to live, they hope to get a higher salary in order to have a better quality of living. So they will try to perform better in their
jobs
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.
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,
people
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 can enjoy other things in life, aside from their
jobs
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.
Work
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 to live means that once leaving the office, citizens can relax
themselves
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and focus more on other things,
such
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 as their hobbies families and friends. They will not be too stressed or anxious as they just see working as a way to make money. To conclude,
work
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 to live is better than live to
work
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 as it can allow citizens to have a
work
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-life balance and they can have more time to spend on other categories other than
jobs
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • financial stability
  • personal development
  • career advancement
  • fulfillment
  • leisure
  • self-care
  • burnout
  • stress
  • setting boundaries
  • professional success
  • personal satisfaction
  • harmonious balance
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