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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

A large number of
people
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 think that a
person
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's
culture
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 and personality can be
showed
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 through the style and the way of wearing
clothes
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. In my opinion, I do not completely agree with
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 statement.
To begin
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 with,
people
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are tend
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 to wear Western
clothes
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 in every
coutries
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countries
 ;
therefore
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 their style does not
show
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 their
culture
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. In fact,
people
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 choose casual
items
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 like
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dress
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a dress
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, T-shirt , a pair of jeans,etc. which are follow the
lastast
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lastest
latest
 style rather than their own tradition.
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, it is difficult to
anserw
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answer
 whether a
person
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 on a road is from
Vietname
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Vietnam
 or Korea if she wears a Zara
dress
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.
Traiditional
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Traditional
clothes
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 which can
show
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 the cultural
specificaiton
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specification
 rather than modern
items
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 do not disappear recently.
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, modern
dress
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 or suits does not
to
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show
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people
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's
culture
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 and character.
Besides
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,
i
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 do not believe that the way choosing
clothes
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 could
show
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character
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the character
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 of
people
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. A major of
people
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 wear the
items
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 that they like rather than the meaning of
items
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.
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, one of my
friend
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friends
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 is a big fan of rock bands, so she
like
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likes
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 to go
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dress
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dressed
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with
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in
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 unique
clothes
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likes
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like
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a lather
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lather
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leather
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 coat, black long shoes.
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However
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 she is a hospitable and friendly
person
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.
Therefore
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, the best method to adjust a
person
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 is their
attituade
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attitude
, their way to interact and
comminicate
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communicate
 with others To conclude, it is wrong to consider the
culture
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 and character of
people
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 by seeing their choice of
clothes
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. I believe that it is effective to see their acts in daily life rather than their
items
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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