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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person #culture #character #choice #clothes
A large number of
people
 think that a
person
's
culture
 and personality can be
showed
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 through the style and the way of wearing
clothes
. In my opinion, I do not completely agree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with,
people
are tend
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 to wear Western
clothes
 in every
coutries
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countries
 ;
therefore
 their style does not
show
 their
culture
. In fact,
people
 choose casual
items
 like
dress
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a dress
the dress
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, T-shirt , a pair of jeans,etc. which are follow the
lastast
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lastest
latest
 style rather than their own tradition.
For example
, it is difficult to
anserw
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answer
 whether a
person
 on a road is from
Vietname
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Vietnam
 or Korea if she wears a Zara
dress
.
Traiditional
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Traditional
clothes
 which can
show
 the cultural
specificaiton
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specification
 rather than modern
items
 do not disappear recently.
As a result
, modern
dress
 or suits does not
to
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apply
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show
people
's
culture
 and character.
Besides
,
i
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I
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 do not believe that the way choosing
clothes
 could
show
character
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the character
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 of
people
. A major of
people
 wear the
items
 that they like rather than the meaning of
items
.
For example
, one of my
friend
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friends
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 is a big fan of rock bands, so she
like
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likes
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 to go
dress
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dressed
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with
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in
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 unique
clothes
likes
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like
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a lather
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lather
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leather
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 coat, black long shoes.
However
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,However
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 she is a hospitable and friendly
person
.
Therefore
, the best method to adjust a
person
 is their
attituade
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attitude
, their way to interact and
comminicate
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communicate
 with others To conclude, it is wrong to consider the
culture
 and character of
people
 by seeing their choice of
clothes
. I believe that it is effective to see their acts in daily life rather than their
items
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