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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read what they want online without paying any cost To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is predicted in a few years that
people
 will use the Internet for reading
books
 or following the news as they are free of charge
instead
 of purchasing periodicals and
books
. Nowadays, already most of the society has been using their electronic gadgets for reading online because it is more practical and environment-friendly.
However
, the news platforms and online bookstores are not free of charge and require a subscription. In
this
 essay, I will discuss
this
 point of view and give my opinion. Technology has offered
people
 the luxury of learning and staying informed about the latest updates in the world wherever they are.
Moreover
, some individuals argue that using tablets and phones over paper-based periodicals helps save the environment and causes less pollution and deforestation.
For example
, it is uncommon to see
people
 reading newspapers in cafes or holding paper
books
 on the metro as most individuals have their eyes locked on their
phone
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. Most online platforms make a profit from the advertisements displayed on their web page,
as a result
, they allow readers to use their services for free or for a small monthly fee.
For example
, The New York Times offers only one article per day for free,
otherwise
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 it requires a subscription to have access to read other materials.
On the other hand
, most E-
books
 are only available to purchase for a price lower than the price for hard-cover and soft-cover
books
 to encourage
people
 to use E-
books
. In conclusion, electronic devices and online browsing will replace
paper based
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books
 and magazines.
However
,
this
 change will not be totally free of charge but will cost them less money in the long term as they will be using the same electronic gadgets and paying smaller fees.
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support
Provide more specific examples to support your points, especially regarding online subscriptions and environmental impacts.
clarity
Clarify your stance more explicitly in the introduction and conclusion to strengthen your argument.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a good structure.
content
The points about environmental benefits and technological advancements are well-explained.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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