You recently bought some train tickets for a journey a week in advance. When you went to the station to catch the train, you were told you could not use the tickets and the staff were very unhelpful to you. Write a letter to the train company. In your letter describe the problem you had with the tickets say why you were unhappy with the staff suggest what action the train company should take

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in connection with a
problem
I had with the journey on 21 May. In the beginning, I bought some train tickets for a journey online, from the White Station website, before I arrived at the station.
Although
I had checked the price, the time and the passenger's identification, the train staff did not allow me to use my tickets.
Moreover
, They did not address
this
problem
. So I was unhappy with the staff. To explain more, when I asked about a central office to manage that situation, None of the staff did not answer my question.
In addition
, They did not tell us about the details of
this
problem
.
Last
but not least, I suggest that you send a letter and explain the reason for my
problem
.
Moreover
, I expect you to refund the payment and provide me with a new ticket. I look forward to receiving a message from you. Yours sincerely, Mahshid Kargar
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task achievement
Try to add more specific details about your experience with the staff and specify the problem with the tickets to strengthen your task response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure all sentences have proper grammatical structure, as some sentences need slight improvement for clarity. For example, 'None of the staff did not answer' should be 'None of the staff answered.'
coherence cohesion
The letter contains a clear and concise greeting and closing, maintaining a polite and formal tone throughout.
coherence cohesion
The organization and structure of the paragraphs effectively cover the required points: the description of the problem, the reason for dissatisfaction, and the suggested actions.
task achievement
The writing tone is formal and suitable for a letter of complaint, meeting the expectations of such correspondence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disappointed
  • inconvenience
  • frustrated
  • incompetent
  • unhelpful
  • inconsiderate
  • ruined
  • compensation
  • refund
  • apology
  • reimbursement
  • improvement
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