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The increased world demand for oil and gas has made it necessary for locating these sources in remote and untouched areas. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of damaging these natural areas?

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It is suggested by many a man that
oil
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 drilling should take place in those spaces where humans have failed to interfere in order to meet the escalating demand of
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fuel
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 in society.
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 statement because
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 suggestion may reduce the price of the
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 , the demerits in the form of threat to the
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 of living organisms and marine soul certainly outstrip the merits. To commence with, finding the
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 sources in untouched
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 can
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 human civilization dear in long run.
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, the initial
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 of settling the infrastructure in the harsh conditions of remote
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 is quite high . Even if the scientists get successful in working at the deserted islands, the chances of accidents caused by pipe leakages will always waver around their heads, and the catastrophic destruction caused by
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 accidents to the marine
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 would be uncontrollable. Who can forget the
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 spill in Alaska in 1989, as a consequence of which 250000 sea birds and 2800 sea otters lost their
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, balancing the ecosystem? Not far behind is the risk of
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 evolved in doing
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 drilling operations in the far-away
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 . The places like Alaska and Antarctica are equipped with -50c temperature which is certainly unhabitable for the individuals working there.
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, the workers put their
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 at the stake
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in a bid to extract
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 from the natural environment,which is totally unjustified on humanitarian grounds. Notwithstanding the risks involved in
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 extraction,the economists believe that exploring the serene arenas will bombard us with a huge supply of
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 that could lower the current escalated rates of
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 in several countries of the world.
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, the lower prices would easily be affordable by the weaker section of society ,
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 boosting the economy of the country .
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, several middle-class Indians were unable to manage their household expenses, when it comes to reaching the price of diesel and petroleum at 100 per litre as per the recent survey conducted by the Human Resource Department of India. To conclude, while every growing need of human beings come at a
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 , like the
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 of
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 extraction from the remote
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 will be paid by marine creatures and the
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 specialists working there, despite the fact that
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 extraction will meet the rising demand of
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 at the global level.
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, the disadvantages outlaw the merits.
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