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Some people think that public libraries are no longer important, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Public
libraries
 used to be the house that contained knowledge and information, but in recent years many individuals are arguing that
libraries
 have become a thing of the past, while others believe that
libraries
 are something essential. In
this
 essay I will be discussing both views and why I do agree with the
second
 opinion.
To begin
 with,
people
 who opine that
libraries
 are no longer important base their argument on the fact that most
people
 do not have the time to stop at
libraries
 and
this
 is mainly because of hectic work schedules.
Moreover
 , due to
technological
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,
,
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advancement many
people
 are turning to
read
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 electronic
books
 because they are more convenient and affordable than going to
libraries
 to borrow
books
. A recent study that was conducted in the UK showed that the number of
people
 visiting the
libraries
 has declined from the past decade by half.
However
,
libraries
 have been around forever , the oldest known library goes back to the seventh century B.C, at ,
first
 the library was used to house religious text, but nowadays it provides various resources and search tools for both individuals and communities.
Although
libraries
 are getting left behind as technology takes over our life, we can not forget that
libraries
 provide students in schools and colleges a relaxed environment to study.
Furthermore
 ,
libraries
 contain computers, printers and other useful tools that help pupils in doing projects and research.
Moreover
 , many individuals can not afford to buy
books
,
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 and do not have access to computers.
Therefore
, Here comes the most important role of the library which is the place for
people
 to borrow
books
 and use computers. In conclusion, on the one ,hand we can not deny that the importance of
libraries
 has decreased through time and especially because of technological revolution,
on the other hand
 ,
libraries
 have always been and will always be a place that gathers information for generations to come .
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