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Although most people are reacher than in the past, modern life seems very stressful and the number of people are suffering from stress is at record level. What are the main causes of stress in modern life and how could stress be reduced.

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 most
people
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 are reacher than in the past, modern
life
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 seems very stressful and the number of
people
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 is suffering from
stress
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 is at a record level. What are the main causes of
stress
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 in modern
life
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 and how could
stress
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 be reduced.
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 new age
life
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 is different from the past few decades that makes
people
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 suffer from
stress
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. There are various problems for hectic
life
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 and
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 essay will discuss a few of the factors that make
people
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 stressed. Nowadays
people
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 love to make money rather enjoying their
life
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. The living cost has been increased which makes us run towards a stressful
job
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 that pays a lot.
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,
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 world become more competitive so we forget to pursue our passion for doing something we are interested in. As a ,
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 it ends up in pressure and
stress
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 by doing hateful work without any interest in it. For an instance, one who loves photography works in a corporate to earn his day to day living expenses because MNC will pay him more compared to his passion.
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 may
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 him by not doing what he loves. In
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 era, most of us are updated to
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 situation which affects society by pushing them into pressure.
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, most
people
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 are not finding the right
job
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 that matches their qualifications. The main reason for
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 should be the increase in the number of engineering colleges. There are as many colleges now and thousand of engineers are passing out every year but there are not as many
job
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 vacancies which may
stress
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 the youngsters a lot.
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 can be controlled by not giving permission to some of the worthless institutions. So that students may find some other courses which help them to get a
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.
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, I conclude
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 essay by saying that whatever we do there may be
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 like worrying about our future or having some responsibilities that we find overwhelming. So we ourselves find some time to know about ourselves like what we need in our
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 to stay happy.
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 is the best possible solution to live a
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-less
life
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.
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