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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motor-bike. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is an undeniable fact that all the governments are concerned about road
safety
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 as it directly affects the individual’s
safety
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. It is often argued that increasing the legal
age
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 to get a driving license can definitely bring more
safety
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 on the
roads
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.
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, I firmly agree with the given notion. Apparently, raising the legal
age
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 of driving holds a wide range of constructive benefits.
To begin
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 with, many people die daily on the
roads
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 only because the highways, paths, and avenues are not safe and the main issues are young drivers; since they do not have experience of driving and
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 causes danger for themselves and others. As an instance, in Iran, in the winter,
roads
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 get covered by snow and it becomes a difficult situation to handle the car. One young driver, who got his license 1 month back, could not handle the car, an accident might happen.
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, young drivers do not focus on the traffic signs, which may cause fatal mishaps.
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, older individuals are more responsive to others; while, young adults do not have
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 ethic. As an example, older drivers reduce their speed when they come near footpaths, as they worry about others'
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.
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, many people were injured.
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, They drive very fast, and most of the time they drive rashly. These are some reasons that increasing the
age
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 to drive can bring more
safety
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 on the
roads
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. To recapitulate,
roads
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 have to be safe for citizens and one of the most effective methods to improve
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safety
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 can be done by raising the legal
age
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 of driving cars and bikes.
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