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The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Due to the stagnant development of the
economy
 and the impact of Covid-19, many
people
 around the world are facing the risk of losing their job. While some argue that government should provide a basic living income for those who have lost their job, I personally think
this
 is an unwise policy from both the personal level and the social perspective. On the one hand, simply providing financial support to
people
 in difficult situations will definitely bring more negative impacts on individuals themselves. Most of the time,
people
 who receive financial aid from governments are more likely to accept the reality and give up trying to work out the issue themselves. If their unemployed situation is caused by their lack of professional skills
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 or their own mistakes at the workplace, they will lose a good opportunity to learn the lesson, let alone build up their own competence.
Therefore
,
instead
 of helping
people
, governments are depriving individuals’ capability in life by giving them money when they lose jobs.
On the other hand
, subsidizing unemployed
people
 will surely end up a poorer social
economy
 as a whole. Obviously, the financial aid won’t be much, so
people
 are still holding less than they did before. Having no job, they inevitably spend less, which,
subsequently
, contribute less to the
economy
.
Furthermore
,
such
 a small amount of money can hardly solve the living problems for the one who is the only bread-maker of a family. How can a portion of subsidy support a whole family?
Therefore
, the social
economy
 will surely suffer due to a higher unemployment rate. To conclude, giving money to individuals should not be a constructive method for governments to solve the unemployment problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic income
  • financial security
  • unemployed
  • poverty
  • support
  • discourage
  • economic growth
  • taxes
  • budgetary strain
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