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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that learning history is totally unnecessary currently in
this
 developing world by some sort of community.
However
, others think
on the contrary
 way that it is an incredibly valuable base of data to observe people’s lives.
This
 essay will discuss both views and give my own opinion below as well. On the one hand, it is somehow true that learning from the past even some piece of knowledge is almost needless. Because new technologies were invented and will be created, comparing old skills to current one has no means.
Thus
, in
this
 existing world
which
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 technology and
base
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 of information are changed every day and which exists today can be invaluable the
next
 day.
For instance
, in about 2000 phones and the internet were not actually highly used compared to the current position.
On the other hand
, populations among the whole world can take somehow benefits from acquiring history.
Although
 it is almost useless by some thoughts of a huge number of public, it has benefits in the particular fields
such
 as management of companies and as well as staffs.
For example
, observing the wars which were held by famous fighters like Amir Temur or Iskandar, it is possible to learn how they could manage and motivate of government and all their army too. In my opinion, learning history has its advantages and
furthermore
 disadvantages as mentioned. If it comes to me, I agree with the letter argue that past is extremely useful to learn managing and other skills connected with it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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