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Living in a country where you speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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In
this
 neoteric epoch, most youngsters prefer to migrate to foreign countries for their higher education where the culture of that nation is totally different from their native motherland.
However
, communication is a strong barrier for
people
 to socialize and express their views to others. I firmly agree with the aforementioned notion which I would elucidate in the subsequent paragraphs with specific reasons. To commence with, to live in a country where a diversity of
people
 are residing with different cultures and languages, is a daunting task for an individual. The reason behind it without a common
language
, it is a herculean task for
people
 not only to express their own feelings but
also
 to understand the emotions of others.
For instance
, I have been in Canada for the
last
 1 year and there are a plethora of
people
 who are not able to understand the common
words
 of English.
Hence
, without interacting with others it is impossible to become a social person. Moving
further
, for individuals it's very challenging to learn the ABC of a new
language
 even after a strong dedication and determination of learning,
people
 remain unsuccessful to remember the treasure of
words
 of
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different
language
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.
Moreover
, they often mix their own
language
 with a foreign
language
.
For instance
, there are many common
words
 that have different meanings in different languages. Sometimes, these
words
 become a reason for conflict among the
people
. To agglomerate, to live in a country where a diversity of
people
 is speaking different languages is a difficult task to socialise with
people
.
Hence
, it is recommended, if the adolescents want to survive in a foreign nation they should try to speak the common
language
 of that nation
instead
 of their mother
language
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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