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Band 6.5

Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Many
people
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 claim that modern
technology
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 makes
people
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 more social. I partly agree with
this
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 view because digital tools connect us more widely, but they can
also
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 reduce the depth of real friendships. On
one
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the one
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 hand,
technology
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 helps
people
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 stay in touch. Mobile phones and online platforms let families and friends talk in real time, no matter how far apart they live.
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, a worker abroad can video-call their parents each day and share
daily
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their daily
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 life. Social networks
also
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 help
people
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 join groups based on hobbies or work. Someone who loves photography can find hundreds of like-minded members within minutes. In these ways,
technology
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 clearly expands the number of social contacts and makes it easier to maintain them over long periods.
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, online contact can be shallow. Text messages and short posts cannot fully replace face-to-face talks, where tone, body language, and eye contact add meaning. Many young
people
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 spend hours scrolling through feeds
instead
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 of meeting friends in person. Over time,
this
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 habit weakens conversation skills and may even lead to loneliness.
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,
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technology
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 builds wider networks, it often reduces the quality of real-life interaction. In my view,
technology
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 has a double effect. It increases the size of our social circles but can lower their quality if overused. The key is balance: using digital tools to stay connected
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 still making time for real meetings and shared activities. In conclusion,
technology
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 both helps and harms social life. It makes communication easier and broader, but we must use it wisely to keep friendships strong and meaningful.

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task response
The essay shows both sides and has a clear view. To improve, give stronger proof for each point and add one more real example for how tech helps and hurts social life.
coherence cohesion
The text flows well and uses linking words like On the one hand and On the other hand. One idea per paragraph is good, but some ideas feel a bit loose. Improve by keeping each paragraph to one main idea and tie each idea closely to the main view.
content
Clear view that tech can both help and harm social life.
structure
Good use of links such as On the one hand / On the other hand.
style
Easy to read with short sentences and common words.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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