Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many people believe that the loss of plants and animals
species
is the biggest environmental problem of our generation, while others argue that there are other issues that should be considered more. In
this
essay, I will be discussing both views and
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my opinion. The extinction of many
species
has always been one of the biggest concerns of human society. We have seen many
species
become endangered and even extinct.
This
is mostly due to human activities.
For example
, according to advanced technology in commercial fishing, nowadays, more amount of fish to be
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is increasing compared to that in the past.
As a result
, the marine food chain is imbalanced and it negatively
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other water
species
due to lack of food
resouces
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resources
.
However
, there is
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serious issue to be considered which is that our planet is being destroyed by our own actions. To illustrate, the flourish in commercial activities encourages the manufacturing processes that emit gases that are harmful to the planet atmosphere.
As a result
,
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global warming occurs as the world temperature rises because the sun rays can reach the world
suface
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surface
more easily. Following that, many
species
have died out because they were not able to adapt to the new standard. Some scientists
forcasted
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forecasted
that it might result in the
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of
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water level that will replace land areas in which people live. In summary, not only particular
species
but
also
every other living creature will be endangered. In conclusion, the extinction of particular
species
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issues that we should consider seriously.
However
, in my opinion, global warming should be the most important problem that every people should be concerned
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it might put every living thing in danger.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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