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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#media #interaction #people #society
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Nowadays, Increasing social
media
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 is developing day by day.
As a result
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,
People
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 easily contact anyone in society and need help with social
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instead
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 of direct meetings. If there have
also
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 disadvantages is that social
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people
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 sometimes be bad. without knowing them only the via of social
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 can help to befriend. Now I intend to analyse the topic.
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 with, using social
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 is helpful for the whole world. For those
people
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 easily contact the public in anywhere and any places without seeing them. The
first
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 and foremost advantage is that most of the
people
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 are now stay busy with their work so that they cannot connect the community
people
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. As
result
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 social
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 is a great way. For ,instance if one person is a doctor but needs to help a lawyer for any reason. Though he is not interacting with the community
people
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 he is so much interacting with social
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 and knows the good lawyer.
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 easily doctor contacts him via social
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 and share with him the problem. Moving to the
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, helping the social
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 most
instead
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 of direct meeting. Even
people
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 who wanted to go to any other places or
country
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 but they did not know that community,
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 social
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 easily helps them to contact with that countries
people
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.
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, the
student
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 wants to go higher studies and get opportunities but he does not know the environment of
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country
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.
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 social
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 helps him to communicate with
people
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 abroad. Though the benefit is there drawbacks
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 happen.
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 as the
student
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 does not know
people
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's behaviour and how they are friendly in
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country
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. At,
first
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 he needs to talk to them face to face and stay with them for some days or months directly.
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 the
student
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 understands the
people
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 it's difficult for the
student
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 to know the behaviour of
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country
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people
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 by social
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. To conclude, Social
media
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 has advantages and disadvantages both. But the busy world is now tough to communicate directly whether social
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 gives
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 opportunity. Here show the advantages is outweigh than disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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