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Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

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With the advent of modern technology, we are experiencing
a great deal of
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equipments
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equipment
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 making space
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 our households. From mixer grinders to vacuum cleaners, we have machines doing plenty of jobs for us. I agree that
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 revolution has brought many benefits but there are some drawbacks too.
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, these devices save a lot of time as doing some of these works manually are extremely
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.
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, washing clothes and utensils have become quite easier with
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washing machines
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 and
dish-washers
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dishwashers
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.
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, working without electronics can be tiresome for a lot of people. Several elderly folks staying on their own can find it immensely difficult to finish these tasks and
equiments
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requirements
 can make things really convenient for them.
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, technology
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internet
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 of things enables us to control the devices with merely a press on
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, voice, and even our gestures.
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, these
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 are making us dependent on them.
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, electronics have become
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 of every house and
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 is causing laziness in human beings. A person does not want to get up
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 his couch even to turn on the lights.
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 is limiting
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physical activities. Some precious skills and
craftmenship
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craftsmanship
craftmanship
 are getting lost as electronic
instuments
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instruments
 are replacing human work. Activities
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 as knitting and weaving at home with hands might be forgotten in future as machines are taking over and people might not want to engage
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time consuming
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 activities any longer.
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, not everyone can afford all these appliances as these are hugely expensive for a number of individuals. In the conclusion, the devices can make life certainly easy, we can save our valuable minutes and focus on more important work that can help us grow.
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, it's
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 crucial to be fit and active and not to be so reliant on the machines.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Manual labor
  • Displacement
  • Homemaking skills
  • Technological advancements
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Resource depletion
  • Energy efficiency
  • Social dynamics
  • Operational understanding
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