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Social Media has helped us increase our virtual networks. This has isolated us physically, making us socially awkward in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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With the growth of social
media
 in recent times, we have completely changed the way we interact with
people
 in our daily lives. While some
people
 believe that
this
 made us socially awkward others opine
this
 helped many to overcome their social anxiety. It has helped
people
 overcome their worst fears in interacting with
people
.
Therefore
, I don't agree that it makes our physical interactions uncomfortable.
First
 of all, by growing our social
media
 presence we could make connections with
people
 worldwide which wouldn't have been possible
otherwise
.
This
 will encourage us to interact with
people
 from different cultures and vivid personalities which builds confidence with every interaction and can be carried over in real life.
For instance
, without social
media
, we would make very few friends which will limit our worldview and hinder our confidence.
Therefore
, virtual interactions can be very helpful in tackling awkwardness.
Secondly
, it helps us to find groups with similar interests which make learning or exploring more fun. Often, we struggle to find companions with similar interests in group activities where
people
 are sometimes forced to get along with the rest of the team to not sound rude.
For example
,
people
 interested in making sandcastles can form a group and get together on a holiday. Social
media
 has become a standard place to meet like-minded
people
 virtually
first
. It helps them to form meaningful connections which encourages them to participate without feeling pressure.
Therefore
, it doesn't make our physical interaction awkward but helps us in making it more beautiful.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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