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Arranging Accommodation You are being sent on a one month work assignment in San Francisco, California. You need a place to stay while you are there. Write a letter to the Maury Samson Real Estate Agency. In your letter: explain the situation describe the kind of accommodation you would like provide the dates you will need it Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr Samson, You should write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

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Dear Mr Samson, The reason I am writing to you is to ask you to find me an apartment for one month.
To begin
 with, I would like to point out that I want my apartment to be with a bathtub and a shower. I want two single beds and a large hall. There must be a lot of free space.
Also
, the accommodation should be new in white and black or pastel colours.
Additionally
, I want to have a personal backyard, where I can spend time with my colleagues. The main request I have is that I do not want any noisy neighbours, because I have trouble sleeping.
Secondly
, I cannot tell you precise dates but I can provide you with approximate information that I will be there from May 10 to June 11. I hope for your understanding and I will tell you the exact dates a little later.
To sum up
, you can contact me by number +390662138791 and we will discuss all my preferences. I look forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Kseniia Malokhatko
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task achievement
Although the letter is almost excellent, ensure to provide precise dates when possible for clarity.
coherence
Consider introducing more transitional phrases between paragraphs to enhance the logical flow.
task achievement
The letter effectively addresses the purpose and provides relevant details.
task achievement
The writing tone is formal and appropriate for a letter of this nature.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear and logical structure, making it easy to follow the writer's requests and intentions.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph conveys a single idea, contributing to the coherence of the letter.
coherence cohesion
The salutations and closings are excellently crafted, adding to the professionalism of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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