The advocates of international aid believe that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while the opponents consider it unnecessary, because money is misspent by the governments that receive it. Discuss these two points of view and give your opinion.

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There is a big financial gap between developed nations and countries of the
third
world,so advocates of humanity are coming up with favouring for monetary help on humanitarian bases but in some cases those aid ,do not help the real needy people.
Instead
used up in other non-urgent issues by local
governments
.The
next
paragraphs will elaborate on the issue in detail. In the final,I believe if the monetary assistance goes from hand to hand
then
it is okay
otherwise
will be wasted in the name of humanity. In recent periods number of events happened where, there was a call for helping countries suffering from either terrorist activities or political instability and citizens of those countries ,going through, a deficit of food,medical and common sanitary supplies. So people all over the world and international aid society like the red cross, push supply and financial help through their government's accounts ,despite supplying more than enough material and money at ground level condition was worsening only and those
governments
using those scenarios, keep asking for more and more financial support.After some time it came out that the government was using those funds for improving their military and other infrastructure which is a slap on the face to international agencies. Taking lessons from above, in the future any aid can be directed towards the actual end-users should request local
governments
to provide a chain for reaching and safety of international crew members.In that ,way we can make sure the help going in the right hands.Due to the greedy behaviour of some local ruling ,leaders we should not turn our heads away from humanity.
Furthermore
making sure that money goes in the proper way is our duty to check rather than blindly trusting those local
governments
. In, conclusion,due to a couple of instances of dishonesty by local ruling bodies, humanitarian work should not stop but keep going with more definitive measures ,where all the resources and finances should be directed towards the actual sufferers not to the local rulers.
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